I don't think the statement "recently became a professional organizer" is the best wording. I'd take out the word "recently".
I'm a little torn on mentioning your husband's and son's names on the site. It isn't a very business-like thing to do so if you are trying to look like a serious business, I'd reconsider that. If you are going for a more informal approach as a mom just looking to make a little money on the side, then I think it works fine the way it is.
I agree with Russell that you need more info about what it is you actually do and what services you provide. Give examples (they don't need to be true, just realistic).
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* Despite the high cost of living, it remains very popular.
* Why should I pay for my daughter's education when she already knows everything?
* There are no shortcuts to anywhere worth going.
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